Dynasty cow

Right . ok i feel i have to say somthing cause you probably spent more time ediding my thingy than it took me writing it , thanks . and ill ...

The whole thing was realy good . for the first time in a novel i didnt keep on reading because i was curious but cause it was almost peacefilling . ...

im 13 and i wouldent have i hope in hell of making somthing so complex and fun ,although my work is good in a differnt way , youve got loads ...

it was all good until my skin is peachy red , i didnt quite get that . :shock: [/quote]

all the mistakes and grammer problems can be changed but the writing was exelent , the story was ok be honest the plot was cra..bad , you should have wrote ...

I dont know , im trying to find the perfect story and then make it a full novel , I got pretty far on chickens revenge but then i ditched ...

please do more , that was real and anyone who sais its bad , there just jelous jk

a odd mix of storyness and poemness but still good

huh

cheers

that was realy exiting , i liked the start , but maybe a better ending

i liked this , it didnt have lots of synamontrates displayed in a cordinated and organised style but what you gona do , keep writing

you should be a writer but not this story i found it kinda mehh , you know , .

i was gona read it but its too long , nice name though

The plot was good , so was the plot but you should have put more discription . i would expect much less from a 16 year old (you,meaning that your ...